2013年3月2日雅思大作文真题TASK2

文章词汇表达丰富，学术词汇积累做的也很棒；可适当增加从句和复杂句使用；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。

Since the internet appeared,the world has been seeing the large development of the remote education for decades.However until today we still cannot make it out exactly whether this tendency is good for our human or not.I think the answer is that the advantages of this development overweight the disadvantages. As we can see,there are lots of desirable aspects to tempt me to support it.Firstly,remote education can decrease the waste of the valuable real estates.If we were to establish the valid system,the land for school could be used for other enterprises as well as the buildings for classrooms and dorms.And all the things the remote education needs is only hundreds of wires to transmit the digital information from teachers to students.Secondly,the schools fees would become lower than now.And distribution of the educational resources could be more fairly is the last reason in my mind. There are ,nonetheless,some disadvantages.Some people may mention that remote education would cut off the communications among the students and teachers and it will lead to such bad situation that people would never be enthusiastic to others. However the bad influence can be limited if we found another system to make people communication as usual.So our human must benefit from the inevitable trend.