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If my foreign friend is going to visit my hometown,I will take him/her to see the Little Park.The Little Park is not tiny but massive.There has many old building called dangerous house and in my eyes that were recording the devoloment of shantou.It has the outshanding building at the 19s.Twenty year ago,there were booming until now,there are has many delicious food of CHAOSHAN.Not only the building is beautiful but also there were so quite that you can calm down yourself.