过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;句式变化多样;拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用。
The importance of keeping a good mood Nowadays for the modern society is fierce competition,people have to bear many pressures,these pressures include education pressure、Career pressure、Family pressure,etc.some more people look worried,so I think keeping a good mood is very important. I guess keeping a good mood have a lot of benefits,the first of all,when a person has a good mood,he or she have a good spirit,it would bring some benefit to your health and reduce you fall ill of probability. Secondly,I think keeping a good mood,you would take active mentality to thought everything,it would make you reduce fault in your work, so every people around you that would willing coorperation with you,and it would make your family harmony,it similarly would make your education is smoothly. All in all,we should keeping a good mood,it is not only bring some benefit for your health,but it is easy to get along well with other.