作者句法基础不错,可适当增加复杂句的使用;作者词汇量积累不错,但请仔细检查词汇的拼写;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
Living in an age that adolecents lack of guidlance and supervision,we can never fail to figure out the fact that the teenagers become especially self-conscious.Under this circumstence,the youngsters are likely to believe what they have listened or seen instead of think twice before drawing their conclusions,which is pathetically and undoubtly cosidered controversial or even unreasonable. The reason why I insist on the viewpoint that we should never directly and irresponsibly come to conclusions only by listening or seeing main lie in the following two aspects.To the begin,it is a unvariable law to every existance in the world that nothing will stay still even for just one second.so are the things happening around us.what we see or listen may be just some particular period of the developmen of things,which proves unstable and changeable.In addition,the perspectives we conclude just though seeing or listening are usually one-sided.Drawing conclusions rashly is not objective enough to make our statements persuasive. To sum up it is unwise for us to define any thing as what we assum or imagine at frist sight.Only by our serious thinking and accurate analyzing can we come up with more rational and reasonable conclusions.
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