字数:200满分:100分
文中词汇表达较恰当,学术词汇表达灵活;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意极个别句子错误。
From what is vividly depicted in the above picture,we can see distinctly that the right leg of one was bound with the left leg of another.Therefore,the two man must help each other to walk.The picture shows us a profound and lasting significance. On the basis of my observations,three keypoints can be learned from the picture.In the first place,If we don't acquire others assistance,we cannot do anything in a organization.For instance,in a factory,if you want to produce a finished goods,all of departments including purchase department,logistics department,production department and technical department must be worked together.Otherwise you cannot achieve anything.In the second place,No one can know everything on the aspect of knowlege.People who want to obtain tremendous achievement usually need to take in the scholarship of others.Thus they can gain the success.In the third place,none of us can complete a task without others's help. In short,we must help each other to gain the success.