Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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Along with the improvement of living standards,people no longer care the money their earn, but more concern our environment,because there are many pollution around us man facing a big promble with enviroment pollution,now it is time than to fixed it ,what we are going to do ? different people hold different views,some people claim than we should reduce use plastic page ,plant more trees,at the same time we should strengthen our awareness of enviroment protect,while other people think that everyone should take the responsible to protect our environment,especially, industry do not put the pollution water into the river and