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At present, many children cannot deal with the difficulty by themselves because they are not dependent enough. But that is not just their own matters, which are development by their parents. The parents induge children and do all the things for them so they couldn't develop the ability to live by themselves. So it is not strange to see that the young student do not know how to peel the apple. In order to develop the development ability of the children, parents should encourage them to do things by themselves and think out ways to handle the emergency, and then they give them solutions and lessons. Taking part in summer holiday camp can make the children be the master of their lives.