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I had a letter from my sister where she said she would come to England next year. If she comes, she, who lives in Nigeria, will be amazed by the vivid and colorful picture: nestled in beautiful countryside, a cute new house with a number of spacious rooms in the beautiful garden ablaze with fiery red roses. Work on the house had begun before she left, and it completed five months ago. Now it is a modern house – the only modern house in this district, though it looks strange to some people.