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Playing football is my favorite sport.Do you know why?I fell in love with it by chance.When I was on my way home I picked a football then I often play football with my friends.From then on,I like playing football deeply.I often tran with my classmates and join in match.Beckham is my favorite football star and my greatest wish is to be a professional football player.