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I went to Zhuhai with my family last year. We enjoyed ourselves there. It is a extremely beautiful seaside city in the south of Guangdong. There are lots of places of interest. We went to Zhuhai Fishgirl. The scenery there is very beautiful. As a seaside city, Zhuhai is also well-known for its seafood. You can taste different kinds of seafood without spending too much money. I won't forget the days we spent in Zhuhai. If I have another chance, I will go there again.