过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;熟练的使用了从句和复杂句;文中词汇表达多样性不足,在学术词汇方面尤其要多积累;请注意分段。
My best friend is Hongli Wang,she is a lovely girl ,we're good friends in the same class from Primary school,Every day go home together,but now,we live in different countries,do different works,and now she's married ,worked in shanghai ,long time no see ,such miss in my heart.Fortunately,we keep in touch with each other all the time,friendship never change.