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Welcome to my hometown.In China,i think the most interesting place is NanJing.You should pay a visit. NanJing is a beatuiful place in JiangSu Province.Actually,nanjing is not just my hometown.In there,you can see FuZiMiao and YUHuatai and so on.Also there are many delecious food.They also have a long history.So i suppose you going to. The last,dear friends.Meet in nanjing