正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Welcome to my hometown.In China,I think the most interesting place is NanJing.You should pay a visit. NanJing is a beautiful place in JiangSu Province.Actually,nanjing is not just my hometown.There,you can see FuZiMiao and YUHuatai and so on.Also there are many delecious food.They also have a long history.So i suppose you going to. The last,dear friends.