单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;文章上下文衔接不是很紧凑,结构缺少组织。
Welcome to my hometown.In China,I think the most interesting place is NanJing.You should pay a visit. NanJing is a beautiful place in JiangSu Province.Actually,nanjing is not just my hometown.There,you can see FuZiMiao and YUHuatai and so on.Also there are much delicious food.They also have a long history.So I suppose you to go. The last,dear friends.See you in NanJing