字数:200满分:100分
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From what is vividly depicted in the above photograph,we can see distinctly that a man sitting in a barbershop requires the barber to shear a hair style similar with Beckham who is a famous football star.He will spend at least RMB300 on the hair style which perhaps does not suit for him.Apparently,the man has a blind worship towards some stars. Why do so many people worship the stars that probably do not correspond with their fame.On the basis of my judgment,three factors contribute to it.In the first place,obviously,most of the stars can make a lot of money,even if they only can sing two or three songs.In the second place,a great number of people want to aquire success through shortcut the same as some stars that do not like to study diligently.Accordingly,people who don't like to learn anything fantasy to gain tremendous achievement without to pay any effort.In the third place,Most of stars display many glamour which attracts lots of young people extremly. In short, we should not worship blindly any stars and try our best to achieve our success by continuous efforts.