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注意:字数:100左右。可适当增加细节,使行文连贯。
请作者增加学术词汇的使用,不过单词拼写做的很好;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章上下文衔接不是很紧凑,结构缺少组织。
Hello! My name is Alice. I’m a bank clerk.I love reading. When I find a good book. I always engross reading it. One day, my best friend Bella came to my home while I reading a complete Lu Hsun. So even though she called me for a long time out of my door, I didn’t hear until she phoned me. Just came into my home, “Sometimes I want to scold you very much as you irritate me but you always don’t know” Bella complained.”I’m so sorry, but I believe that you realize me” I apologized. “As you said, I know a person called Alice who is stubborn and hardworking.”Thanks for your compliment” I kid.”I just didn't admire you!”Bella signed. “Do you know my desire? I always dream of being a writer and English translator. I have trying for it all the time,I know sometimes many people are very helpless to me. I believe a book is a useful thing. I really love reading, so sometimes I don’t ignore you on purpose” I said. “I know ,just what I said was kidding. Simon told me that he would hold a dancing party at tonight . I wonder if you will go? It's heard that the party was a great success last year.””I deeply feel you are so excited!” “Oh, dear ,you know I can’t help going to the party. I’ll give my hair a good wash and wear the best dancing clothes.” Look, Bella is just an active and kind girl. I’m very grateful to meet such a good friend.