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One shocking thing took place in my school several days ago. As usual, I went to the playground with my schoolbag, then I was just able to make out one white figure flying down from the window and suddenly many shouting around my ears. I could say nothing and no walking. I clearly knew what happen. But even though I have heard many similar things yet,I just could not believe it. Although my school forbad us to talk about it, many students guessed the reason why that student suicide. Some said she couldn’t afford the stress of studying, some said the reason lead to her death was her parents' divorce,the other said because she was been wronged to steal money by her room-mates and she was asked to jump out from the window to prove her innocent by them. There are more and more such things have taken place these years, so what should we do? How can we stop the suicide one more happening? As parents, they should teach their children to face the trouble calmly,also they should tell them to try to ask for help if they can’t solve it instead of escaping even suicide. Try to care about their study,friendship and so on, cheer them up from the problems. The most important, tell them to care for their own life, everyone only life once,without life we can do nothing. As teachers, firstly, they should tell the student to learn how to ask for help from the school, pay attention to students’ mental health so that they can encourage the student who are in trouble in time. Secondly, help students realize the importance of life to love it. Finally, teachers must tell students not to wrong others. As students, what should we do,how can we protect our own lives? Though there are generation gaps between our parents and us, no parents don’t love their children. Maybe they discourage us from doing something and we rebellious fairly, but we must know that what they did must be good for us. Parents are most lenient and selfless, they take a lot of to raise us up, we must treasure our own life to repay them. Try to talk with them and tell them our thoughts and feelings so that they can know what we need for getting along better with them.