文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
How to Live a Meaningful Life? Among all the highlighted topics,one is "how to live a meaning life".As for this topic,everyone's opinions varies.As the saying goes:"The greatest use of life is to spend it for something that will outlast it." I cann't agree with it. If one spends all his time in pursuing benefits for himself,he will surely feel fruitless and meaning when he become old. From Nelson Mandela's life,we can get that they never wavered in his devotion to democracy, equality and learning.His life has been an inspiration in South Afria and throughout the world.In a life that symbolizes the triumph of human spirit,Nelson Mandela accepted the 1993 Nobel Peace Prize.His life ,though limited, definitely lasts longer.That's a life worth living. Therefore,if there is a way to make our life more meaningful,I believe it should be to find something I'm interested in and also is helpful to others or the whole society.Only in this way can I keep my passion throughout my life.