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Nowadays, most families have only one child,and for parents, the only child just as the beautiful valuable but fragile jewels on their hand.They do everything for them from clothing to working.But have you ever thought weather it is better for your children or worse? Maybe,some kids are too young to independent,and they can not accomplish everything alone.But it doesn't means everything is impossible for them to accomplish alone.For parents, what they need to do is that let them do alone what they can finished alone,and help them ,not instead of them,to do what they can not finshed alone. Taking more care of kids is good for them sometimes,but not always.For children's independence,keep them alone and help them sometimes is always better for them.