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单词拼写很棒，可考虑增加学术词汇的使用量；文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
In the dense dark, there is a lamp with glad flame which flares up despite the ruthless dark and loneliness. Because it delivers the sense of love which enlighten the darkest corner and warm others around. The flame in the picture stands for the love in everyone’s heart. And this precious ember should be extended to others, sharing our kindness and love with others. Actually the practice is simple, for example helping the old cross the street, guiding tourist to the destination ect.. Moreover, it is surprising to find the feedback from others at the moment we start to do this, which like a Domino effect ,recycling and evolving, and the outcome will be enormous. Thus, such effect will be a thrust to build up a well correlated and harmonious society. A case in point is Kim Yuna, a famous athlete from Korea, who has donated a big fortune to Indonesia after the tsunami. As to the victims, that will be a warm hand helping them to weather the adversity. As a youngster, there is a lot we can do, but what suspends at the top of the list is rather straight forward. Like the proverb says “charity begins at home”. We can be more considerate o family member and friends. We believe that the glimmer of humanity and love will never be extinguished, instead, the glow will reach every corner of shadow.
