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my favorite sport I am football fantastic, playing football is my favorite sport. by chance i pack out a football , then i played it with my friends. since then i fell in love with it. often,i practice it with classmates and compete with them. my favorite football star is 贝克汉姆 which was born in England.i pursue a professional football player in the future