2013年5月16日雅思大作文真题:广告的副作用

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Advertisement can be seen in every corner of our life, which means we can't live without advertisement. There are several kinds of advertisements, long or short, foreign or local,commercial or charity; no matter what type of the advertisements are, to some extent, it changes our outlooks and choices gradually. When we watch TV, when we listen to the radio, even when we go outside by public transport, advertisements are full of our daily life, which encourage citizens to donate blood or money to help people in emergency,which contributes to build a positive outlook. Decades years ago, people bought things always with hesitation because they didn't know which function was better , but now people choose things easily as commercials give them answer. Admittedly, advertisements help us to do a decision quickly; however, we can deny that there is numerous fake information existing. For example, in a famous shampoo ad., how dare a muddy shirt can be washed just like a newly-bought one? Everyone knows that it is definitely impossible but they still insist to by it on condition that in people's subconsciousness, they think this shampoo really can achieve that. It is common that much violence and bloody scenes appear in advertisements, which makes the society inharmonious. As an adult, i can define which is benefit and which is wrong but a large portion of TV watcher are children and they can distinguish from good to bad. If they see that scene and imitate it, then, other kids will be kept in insecurity situation. Many actions can be taken to clean the advertisement clean and the most useful and powerful solution is that both the government and society combine together and resist the fake and harmful ads. to spread in the public. Give more opportunities to these charity advertisement and limit fake and low quality advertisement, which should be put in the priority of relative department's work.