2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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Hangzhou is one of the most beautiful cities in china. i study in Hangzhou ,i like it .if you want to travel in china, i believe you will go here----Hangzhou. if you go to Hangzhou,i will take you around weast lake and Jiuxi mountian . many landges around the weast lake ,however ,the write snake is more famous .the story is that xu xian help the snake ,then the snake loved he, but finally they didn't live together because snake and man can't fall in love.there a broken bridge whitch above one lake ,xu xian and the snake leave in there.so many travellers like standing the bridge and miss the feel. i couldn't help you come.