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My new teacher My new teacher is Kelly Hu.She is my integrated English teacher. In my mind,she is very funny.Because she tells us many foreign stories in class. And many students like her. Kelly has a short black straight hair. She always talk to us with a smile. At my firsy day met her,I think she is a little fat.But nowaday,she looks good. Kelly allows us see the English film in the class,so that we all get alone well with each other. Last but not the least,we will enjoy our integrated English class,becaues we have a interested new teacher whose name is Kelly Hu.