作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;作者使用词汇表达不都灵魂,需要多使用一些学术词汇;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段。
nowadays,an increasing number of people hold the view that they will believe the truth that they see and hear.while,as far as i'm concerned it is not wised to conclude while they see or hear something by themselves. with the society development,our thinking is gradully complex.we never trust people and only believe what we see and hear.it is the reason that makes our far away from us.we would not want it happens.in one side,we should think its truth over .
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