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Hi,welcome to my hometown . I think my hometown is very beatiful.Now let me introduce it to you. My hometown have big mountains ,wide rives ,the third longest river in the world is Changjiangriver .So would you like to have a look?The mountain Tai is very famous in China,it is very grand.But what i most like is Changcheng ,i think it is a symbol of our ancestor"s wisdom,it is so diffcult to climb that i can not climb it over,when you shand in it and look down,you will have a sence of flying So....would you want to stand there,come on i will be the guider for you,and so many snacks is waiting for you
