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I am live in a small town, when I was young, there were a lot of tree around it,there were so many fishes swimming in the river, most of the people are poor and the houses were thin and roads were narrow, but people very happy and enjoy the fresh air. now,there are many high buildings build,a lot of facotry instablish,most of people have a lots money,but they are not happy beacuse when they talk a walk in the street,might smell the bad smell and see many rubish,the river without fish now.we hope come back past,we call out the govement to deal with this problem agerently.