作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;可适当增加从句和长句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
I am a student from Hangshan University,majoring in Chinese and English Secretary.At present,I am a sophomore.I have been always dreaming of studying abroad.However,as a result of knowing a little of about it,there are a few questions I need to consult to you. How can I get the visa to go to America?What certificates do I need to pass?The last but not the least,how much it will cost if standing in America for a year? Although I am not the top student in our school,I will try my best to make myself better.Thank for you attention,looking forward to your letter back.