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How to improve the school safety School safety is a matter of great importance. Great efforts should be made by the school to make sure the campus is safe. Firstly, nobody permission. The school guard should check everyone entering the school Besides, the school security guards should walk arothe campus from time to time so that by the school. Students can be taught what to do when faced with danger. As for us students, we should keep safety in mind whatever we do. We shouldn't trust strangers or give away our personal information to them.