文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;从句使用不错,但需加强复杂句的使用;文章层次较为清晰。
As the proverb goes,where there is a will,there is a way.We often be confronted with difficulties,and we often be upset when we fail.In my opinion,we ought to confront the difficulties we meet. If we want to get something we have never had,we must do something we have never done.When we across the divide of the difficulties we meet,we will realize that the thing behind difficulties is success. So,don't leave your determines,and rage your dreams,your dreams will come ture.