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I ask a psychology teacher named Kelly Lam about china students 'opinions of share feeling last weekend.The fact is that no matter is happy or sad,the students more than 30 percent is not willing to share with others.And our education does not make students know the importance of share. The teacher thinks it is necessary for our students to learn share feeling at the age of our living. Besides,we should learn how to share feeling,which does well in that we grow up.