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the most forgettable thing there are many forgettable things occured in my life since i could remember things. however ,one of the deepedst things still stand in my brand clearly even though it is happened twelve years ago. when i was ten yeras i got an illness that nearly could not be completely curable.so i am very greatful that my dear parents did not give uo me and made their efforts to save my life .on one day morning i was twelve years ,my mother had to take me to the hangzhou province in order to get better doctors for me but it is unfortunately that we wre strange about the city,of course my father didi not accompany with us for he had to work hard to support our family i clearly remembered that i did not have breakfast as well my mom . because we had to save our time ,i was so hungry that i cried, my mom comfort me that she would buy food when we reached .however , when arrived at hangzhou my mom almost did not know where to go next step.
