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My Hometown My hometwon is located in the southeast of hubei province, and it is a beautiful twon. In the past,because the envirvoment is better,so the villeage was surroudded by mountians and the river was very clearn. We even could see the fish playing in water. People lived there were work in land ,eventhough they woked very hard but the gain was very poor. According to the development of the technology, our hometown was changed a lot, now ,we can see the buildings everywhere, and there are lots of cars in roads. But one coin always has two sides,because of the environment is polluted worse and worse, the trees are reducing and the finshes are disappearing, so the most important things we should pay attention is the pollution