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Dear Dad, I'm writing this letter to you, I choose this way to express my feelings because maybe it's a little embarrassed to discuss something about smoking face to face with you. Dad, I would like to say : Both Mom and I really want you to get rid of smoking. When I read an article about smoking lead our body breaking down, I was very worried about your health because you have smoking for twenty years since I was a baby. So I ask you do not smoke any more. it is well known that smoking is dreadful for people's body and lungs. I told you to get rid of smoking a lot of times. But you never put my words into your heart before. You say smoking can relax yourself. But do you know, on the one hand it may make you ill, even kill you. On the other hand my mom and me are the victim when you smoke around us. My dear dad, not only my mom but also I love you very much. Neither of us wants to lose you in the future. you are my farther and my mom's husband, you are not alone and you are very important to us. In my heart, you are my best father as well as my closest friend, at the same time my mom told me that you are greatest husband in the world. We know it is not easy for you to give up smoking. But you have to do it. You must know when we breathe your smoke, it is just like we are smoking ourselves. Thus, we will become ill easily. Do not forget we are the consortium. We, my mom and I will all support you and help you. Dear dad, you love mom and me a lot, So please give up smoking as soon as possible. All of us want to live in this world without smoke. And everyone wants to live longer. I really wish that you can listen to me and get rid of the smoking. your lovely son chenglin
