句法方面做的很棒,加强复杂句的使用;作者词汇基础不错,同时请加强单词拼写的检查;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
With the pace of life gradually accelerated, people perfer to do sthing right now once they seen or heared. On the one hand, it can cut down the working hours and improve the efficiency. In some degree, as a saying goes,"time is money, time is life." On the other hand, it is not wise for finding a conclusion by seeing or hearing sthing. There are three reasons for this view. Firstly, it maybe lead to a misunderstanding, if only for looking the surface. In morden sociaty, we need face to more complicate environment. The cruel fact is that what we see may be not the turth. Secondly, the change of world is becoming faster and fater. People often get out informations if they don't judge and analysis it before. Last but not the least, drawing a conclusion but not thinking carefully will make the conclusion to lack theoretical depth so that it will easy to turn down. As far as i am concerned, we should follow a old saying that measure thrice and cut once. In this way, even if we trap in the terrible surrounding, we can keep clam and find the rihgt way. Even if we face to the change of world, we can acquire the newest information. Meanwhile, thinking carefully can improve the conclusion.
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