托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第49篇:坚持不懈是否能让人变得更加强壮

文中衔接词和过渡词使用的很棒；使用了部分简单的长难句，可适当增加一些复杂的长句；文中词汇表达方面较丰富灵活，但在学术词汇的积累上还要再接再厉。

I cannot agree more with such saying that perseverance makes people stonger for the following reasons. First of all,we can strengthen our bodies especially muscles by insisting in doing sports in the leisure time for 30 minutes per day.As we know,the sportsmen who has did sports for long ages are always in the mental, physical and social well-being rather than the absence of diseases which common people are in.For instance,a kind senior citizen,one of my neighbors,used to be weak whereas he seems like a adolescent now after a period of physical training. And in addition,perserverance can push us to face and give solutions to the matters and problems we rushed into.That would train us to become a brave people.So we can arrive at the mental strength.