2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文中词汇较灵活，但要注意积累学术词汇，拼写错误也要注意；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。

On Excessive Packaging It is commonly to package goods in a excessive way in the rencent year.A variety of goods are packaged in this way. According to this issue,I deem that they have followed reasons. As follows,firstly,on excessive packaging,bussinessmen can earn more money.secondly,people who buy these goods feel confident . thirdly ,in the modern life ,goods with delicate package will appeal to people's attention. As far as I am considered,I disagree with it.If I am a business man ,I would balance consumers ideas and my profit.In addition, I consider consumers as gods,I will protect them .