作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;上下文衔接稍显不流畅;作者词汇量积累需要继续努力,尤其学术词汇还有很大提升空间,另外拼写检查还需加强。
Now people in growing numbers are beginning to celebrate the Western Festivals,and it had a heat discuss.Some people think that it will bring unfavorable effects.Other individuals,however,belibve that it can reap huge fruits.I give my vote to the latter opinion. From my own perspective,the reasons on how to exert this phenomenon lists as follows.On the one hand,with the development of economy and science,the culture interaction are also having an more important role among the countries of the whole world.These people who go aborad and when they came back bring some customs of western festivals.On the other hand,celebrating western festivals is a way of improving oneselfe and comunicating with other countries.In this way,people can get the new source of their happiness ang contentment. As far as i concerened,its benefits overweigh the disadvantage.Among the countries will promote peace by this way,and it in favour of developing the different culture. In short,we should do our utmost to learn,care and celebrate the western festivals.
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