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My home is very beautiful.There are hard-working and lovely parents as well as cute children.Also,my home is clean.Moreover a television is in the big hall.There are very delicious food in the kitchen.In the my room,many toys were laid.In it,my families lead a happy life.Every day,we all are happy and harmorous.