作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;可适当增加文中长句和复杂句的使用;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词。
If my friend is going to visit my home town,I would like taking him to see the park in my home town.The park is so beautiful that everyone who lives there goes to this park every day.We all like this park,then let me tell something about the park. First and foremost ,there are many flowers and trees.No matter when someone comes here,he can see the beautiful flowers and trees.In addition,Chairs can be found almost everywhere, when you feel tired ,you can sit down to have a rest.Last but not the most important,restaurants there always provide travelers with the most delicious food. To sum up,I firmly believe the park which is in our hometown deserves to be visited.