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To:Mary Chen Date:2008.12.23 Content:I'm your colleague Li Ming.I'm sorry I can't discuss with you guys about the New Year's party of our company because I have to be on a business trip to Beijing for a week and will set out tommorrow.And I will really appreciate it if you can tell others the final discussion about when、where and what to prepare. Thanks.