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题目要求：
What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.题目分析：
改变其环境。
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My hometown is a big city in the middle of China,Wuhan.There are a lot of famous universities and plenty of large companies which means a perfect city for the young people who are ambitious.Thus Result of the economic development,more and more industries rolling in,our environment becomes worse and worse. Above all mentioned,I 'd like to change the air,the water and the street cleaning for my hometown in order to make it more appealing to teenagers.First of all,I recommend that to use the clean energy replacing fuel such as solar,wind or river and so on.What's more,some policies should be published to reduce the use of personal automobiles.For example,to award someone who chooses public bus or train every day. There are amounts of work should be done to make our hometown to be better and better.In my opinion,we should pay fully attention on protecting our environment.
