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题目要求：
What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.题目分析：
改变其环境。
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It is normal that everyone who is ambitious is badly long for success. Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. From my point of view,the ultimate success not only need careful planning also taking some risks or chances is one of the fundamental factors towards success.For example,being a business that gambling a lot even all is necessary sometime they invest money or buy a stock as a way to gain more profit.On the contrary,a large program of a nation or a life plan of an individual should consider a lot and then make a detail planning.What's more,there are amounts of basic needs for preparing for success,such as constant effort,luck and self-confident and so forth. In sum,success is neither depend on taking risk nor careful planning. Almost time we need learn to combine them and other necessary factors.
