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题目要求：
What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.题目分析：
改变其环境。
作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达，一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活；作者句法知识很棒，适当增加从句的使用，会取得更不错的成绩；过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错；请注意分段。
It is normal that everyone is badly long for success. Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. From my point of view,the ultimate success doesn't only need a careful planning but also need to take some risks or chances.For example,as a business that gambling a lot even all is necessary.Besides sometime they take a chance to invest money as a way to gain more profit.On the contrary,a large program of a nation or a life plan of an individual should consider a lot and then make a careful planning.What's more,there are amounts of basic needs for preparing for success,such as constant effort,luck and self-confident and so forth. In sum,success neither depends on taking a risk nor the careful planning. Almost time we need to learn to combine them and other necessary factors.
