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作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；文章词汇表达多样性不足，不过词汇拼写要再接再厉；层次不清晰，几乎没有使用衔接词。
A Beautiful City in China Wellcome to my country -Guangzhou, a city called tne food city. There has kinds of food in Guangzhou, for example ,moon cakes, qingzheng fish, laohuo soud atc. If you go sweat you can see many food around the two sides of it. So you can leave your step to have some good food when you are shopping. Above is not at all. Guangzhou is the shy of shopping. There has many shop of different areas to choose. Therefor,you cann't buy nothing diffcultly if you go to sweat. Buy the way, there has many thing very cheap. In a word, you can buy something cheaply and beautifully. Above all, wherther you have love Guangzhou in what i introduced.
