行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错;适当增加一些复杂句的使用,文章会更棒;文中词汇表达方面较丰富灵活,但在学术词汇的积累上还要再接再厉;请注意分段。
Being in a information society,no one can fail to receive more or less information every minite,no matter by seeing or listening.Then,there comes a question that is it sensible to draw a conclusion the instant we see or hear some news? From my point of view,I think it's irresponsible to do such a judgment.The reasons are as follows.To begin with,what we see is just the happening situation,which is only a microscopic part of the whole process.Only when we learn clear about what has happened even what is going to happen in the future,can we try to make some comments to it.Similarity,the news we heard could be circulated among a large quantitys of people,the issue is sure to be different after being differently comprehended over and over.
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