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My hometown is shanxi .It is a beautiful city .It has long history ,so there are mang interestingplaces. WUTAIshan is the sight of shanxi.It is a natural scien spots in the east of province. The tiees on the mountain is aways green.The temple on the mountain in long history. It is rare and precious.There are some mokes in the temple,and they are kind to visitors.
