2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

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From above picture,people are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see. It shows a social phenomenon that incrasing people use the mobile phone in daily life.The mobile phone is become essential to people,for which occured many problems. To bagan with, many people has relied on mobile phone.they would look to mobile phone anytime and anywhere that has become a accustomry. So, they spend a lot of time with it rather then their relatives and friends,it resulted to lack of conversation with around people. Moreover, if using mobile phone with a lot of time,it will make people's body unheathy,even developing more issus. Actually,the problems are far from these. Acording my analysis, the moble phone indeed bringing out many problems.so for our health in physically and psychological, we should use mobile phone appropraitely.