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My Idea Of A University Arts Festival Life needs art.As a college students,at least in my view that a university arts festival is indispensable.School art festival is a good chance for students to contact more arts as will as expend their knowledge. To be honest,there are various of ways to hold a university arts festival, such as arts lecture、 and Of course , it is meaningful to students and can let them acquire more through that activities.Firstly,students can make use of their spare time to enrich their college life through enjoying the painting and calligraphy exhibition. Besides, students can not only strength communicating with the others,but also can get a better know about by having arts communications. It is common that different people have different views concerning arts.The last but not least,it is an excellent opportunity for students to feel the charming of arts,which maybe be attracted by that great art cultural. All in all,it is obviously that Arts Festival is essential for every university.
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