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In modern society how to make life more meaningful is obviously more and more important ,what king of life is described as the greatest life Firstly journey is an very meaningful ,which can help us expand our eyelight what is more journey is useful for people to build up connections .Secondly helping the disabled people or the old man will make our life more meaningful,thirdly when we are lost in the busy life all day we can choose a little time to study maybe it is useful What should i do to make my life more meaningful ? In my opinion .it is the first idea to study and exercise . As a student ,we have to pour into a real thing .Only in this way can we grow up well in the future